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I am still living
Still breathing
Still here

Look here, I am okay
I have raised myself up
And I have caught myself

I do not need a "prince"
Or a "knight in shining armor"
To sweep me off my feet

I did think I was
Hopeless, but now I am
Not and never will be

I am happy to be alone
I strive to be myself again
Ignoring your opinions

I am still living
Still breathing
Always here
"I'm okay
I'm okay!
I'm okay, now
(I'm okay, now)

But you really need to listen to me
Because I'm telling you the truth
I mean this, I'm okay!
(Trust Me)" -I'm Not Okay, (I Promise)-My Chemical Romance

The worst feeling in the world can be described by everyone in one word: heartbroken. I've felt heartbroken, and my friends have felt the pain also. I just decided to take the emotion and put it into someone who has gotten over it and also to show that it is possible to move on.
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poeticperfectionist Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012   Writer
This is very relatable and connects to me personally a lot. I love the last part about you being always there. It's simple, but the meaning is strong.

My only suggestion is that you maybe add a little more to make it unique; I've heard the phrase "I'm still breathing" quite often(listen to Sober by Kelly Clarkson for example) so it sounds just the slightst bit cliché to me. Still, it's good, you could just improve it to be more. You know?

Overall, it's lovely, be proud ♥
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chibilvr091 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the advice! :) I really appreciate it.
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poeticperfectionist Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012   Writer
You're super welcome! :D

Stay lovely! ♥
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Coercri Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Something people forget when they have their hearts broken. Beautiful poem. :heart:
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Faithsfairy3 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Student Writer
this is exactly what I needed! really good job, I love it! :)
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limarieinred Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This poem so clearly states the struggle many women have in seperating themselves from the expectations of society...
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